1) Gundam Seed-
Her Smile-
Good: show the reason why the author decided to write the fanfiction. It
shows the main character's temperament. The fanfiction is focus on character's
emotion, but didn't lose the battle's depiction. Show the relationship between
every character in the story.
Bad: there are several events described which jumped through the timeframe
in the actual themes of anime but the description of each event is very short.
Therefore, it's difficult to follow the story.
The author said “I hated that Kira didn't get much of his thoughts
out". The composition of story has some problems, but the author has
achieved his goal. The author dislikes some parts of the original, he said it,
and changes it in his fanfiction. Maybe this fanfiction is not a good story,
but i think it's a good fanfiction because author made up his ideal fanfiction.
2) Great Teacher Onizuka-
GTOvsSIS-
Good: no comment.
Bad: 1. It didn't show the main character's temperament. 2. No introduction
for the main character and don't know who is the main character. 3. It doesn't
look like the fanfiction, there is no link to the original amine. It's more
like a new story to me.
Not a good fanfiction.
3) Code Geass-
That Witch has never been told-
Good: It introduces the basic information for two main character. It also
shows the main character's temperament. The author has fanfiction on the love
story of main male character. The author gave a reasonable explanation of why
the main male character said love to the other main female character.
Bad: the main male character's temperament has some change; he changed
from the people that enjoyed war and fighting (never think about love) to a
person that is also care about the love.
This story is not bad but I don't like the change of the character's
temperament. I think a good fanfiction need to catch the main character's
temperament. This fanfiction only catch part of the temperament.
If Lelouch Had a Death Note-
This is a crossover fanfiction. It's very short. I think idea of this
fanfiction is very good, but i think the idea cannot be use in the code geass.
In the code geass, the main character Lelouch is very smart, and he knows his
enemies' name. Death Note is a notebook that can decide the death of people,
the people that has been written down in that notebook will die. Lelouch
already know the enemies’ name, so the story will end straight away as Lelouch
picked up the Death Note.
4) Fairy Tail-
Day and Night-
Good: It has many depict on character's thinking and feeling.
Bad: More description on dialogue is recommended.
Dialogue is very important for the anime. There didn't have any dialogue
in the story, it's a serious part when writing a fanfiction. However, the
overall content is good.
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